Sunday, 20 November 2016

Descriptive writing

















18 comments:

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  2. Hi Zara what a mouth watering post. I like how you described the rap.

    Charlotte B Rimu Team

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  3. Hi Tom you really hooked me in it felt like I was in the freezer... feels good on a day like today, so hot.

    Charlotte B Rimu Team

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  4. Hi Lucy!
    I love Pizza too! And the way that you described it made my tummy rumble. All your juicy words were fantastic!
    From Harriet - Rimu Team

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  5. Hi Oliver I like how you used your senses.I also like your description.Good job on being player of the year.
    Lucia

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  6. Hi Imogen!
    What a funny story, you did great with using describing words!
    Your juicy words were beautiful!
    From Zara - Rimu Team

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  7. Hi Nina,
    Umm I love cheesy pasta too.
    I like how you gave it a rating I think thats really original.

    Charlotte B Rimu Team

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  8. Hi Jesse
    i liked your descriptive language about the pizza it made me want to have a lot of pizza!
    Sasha

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  9. Hi Thomas,
    You must've have worked so hard to complete that it is so interesting your making me crave one as I like this.

    Charlotte B Rimu Team

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  10. Hi India
    I love penguins to they are so cute and cuddly. Your story was amazing I love how you described the water. Have you ever seen a penguin before? Olive rimu team

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  11. Hi Oliver
    the description about the trophy and holding it was very realistic and the way you told the story made me feel like i was there.
    Sasha - Rimu Team

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  12. Hi James
    Sushi is delicious don't you think. My favourite flavour is chicken and avocado. I would so love a piece of sushi right know. Olive rimu team

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  13. Hi Oliver,
    Congrats on getting a hockey trophy!!! I loved your writing, it had heaps of descriptive words and you really painted a picture in my mind. I also liked how you used your senses...e.g, what you smelt, felt...
    Great work!
    Hannah, Rimu team.

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  14. Hey Thomas
    I really like your descriptive language, that's also how I feel when I eat peppermints.
    Alex R - Rimu Team

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  15. Hi Avery,
    What great peppermint writing! I loved how you used your senses, what you smelt, felt...you had great descriptive words and you made me me very excited to read more pieces of your writing!!!
    Hannah, Rimu Team.

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  16. Hi Harry,
    Great writing! You had great discriptive words and you had painted a picture in my mind! I loved how you used the word 'crackled'! You also used your senses very well!
    Awesome job,
    Hannah, Rimu Team!

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  18. Hi Oliver
    Congratulations on getting that trophy, I like how you described getting the trophy with your senses it made really me feel like I was there (I was!!!) great work From Harrison

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